The Heavenly Ledger's warning was not a shriek of terror, but a cold, final decree: [Karmic Source: The Scavenger. Player Tier: Sovereign.] The title itself sent a new kind of dread through him. The Archon was a hunter; a Sovereign a Scavenger was a being that fed on the spoils of others' suffering. It was a level of detached, almost bureaucratic malice that chilled Kael to the bone.
His newfound power, the Karmic Sight, flared to life in response. He didn't just see the physical world; he saw the threads that wove it together. The ground, the ice, the distant void—all of it wove together into an intricate tapestry of flowing energy. And now, he saw new threads, thin, jagged lines of corrupted energy tearing through the fabric of the Vestige Core, drawn to the lingering essence of the defeated Umbral Hounds.
He had won the battle, but the fight had left behind a meal. And the Scavenger had sent its servants to collect.
From a dozen small, chaotic portals that shimmered into existence across the icy plane, the Scavenger's hounds emerged. They were not monolithic beasts of bone and starlight, but a swarm. Thousands of them, each one the size of a fist, their bodies a repulsive fusion of insect-like limbs and writhing tentacles. Their only feature was a single, large, pulsating eye on their chitinous shells. They were a hive mind, and their sole purpose was to consume.
They were drawn not to Kael, but to the lingering karmic essence of the two Umbral Hounds he had just defeated. They moved as a single, liquid entity, their clicking, scraping sounds a terrifying chorus on the silent ice. They were not interested in the living; they were interested in the dead.
But their very presence was a death sentence. Kael's Karmic Sight showed him the truth. The swarm was a virulent plague on the realm. Its consumption of the defeated essence was not just for sustenance; it was a process of converting that raw, valuable energy into a beacon. A beacon that would call the Sovereign himself. Kael was a sitting duck. He had a few minutes at most before his presence was no longer a simple meal, but a final destination.
He couldn't run. The swarm would simply strip the realm clean, leaving him with no resources. He couldn't fight them all. They were too many, and their chaotic, corrupted energy was a poison to his purified essence. He had to be surgical.
Using his Karmic Sight, Kael focused on the swarm. He didn't see individual creatures. He saw a single, collective thread. A thick, luminous tether of corrupted karma that bound them all together. A single point of weakness he could exploit. It was a dark, pulsing core that floated within the center of the swarm, a heart of pure, vile energy.
With his last reserves of mana, Kael took a single, deliberate step, refusing to waste his energy on a futile fight. His fist, his entire being, was focused on one objective: he would shatter the heart of the swarm.
He lunged, not with a flourish of power, but with a pinpoint, precise burst of speed, his movements a blur of grim purpose. The swarm descended upon him, their tentacles lashing out, their chitinous bodies scraping against his skin. He ignored the stinging pain, the low, psychic drone of their collective mind trying to pull his thoughts apart. He pushed through them, his focus unwavering.
He reached the core of the swarm the pulsing, corrupted heart of collective karma. He didn't use a powerful punch; he used a single, pure, precise burst of the Vestige Realm's energy, the very energy that was anathema to the corrupted mana of the scavengers. He plunged his fist into the core, a scalpel of pure light against a cancer of darkness.
The core shrieked, a sound of agony and fury that was both physical and psychic. The entire swarm, the thousands of parasites, froze. Their collective eye-like cores went dark. A moment later, their bodies disintegrated into a cloud of black, shimmering dust that dissipated harmlessly into the cold air.
Kael stood alone once more, his body exhausted, his mana reserves completely depleted. The victory was cold and hollow, confirming to a Sovereign-tier player that he was not just a meal, but a problem that needed to be resolved.
He closed his eyes, his mind already racing. He couldn't stay here. He couldn't cultivate. Every second he spent in this realm was a ticking clock. He needed a true escape, not just a desperate flight. The crystal shard he had found earlier, the one that held the memories of the dead Player, felt strangely warm in his palm. He had only seen the memories, the screams of terror. What if there was more?
He activated his Karmic Sight, not on the surrounding world, but on the crystal itself. He looked past the dead player's despair, past the chaotic memories of a life lost. He saw a faint, silver thread, a single, impossibly thin line of light that was a part of the crystal, yet not of this realm. It was a path. A forgotten exit. An escape route the Scavenger's vile senses, tuned only to the living and the decaying, had completely missed. It was a path forged by a Player who had seen no hope, but still desperately carved a way out.
Kael did not hesitate. He had to follow it. His only chance was to walk into a new kind of hell, one he had to believe was better than the one he was in. He put the crystal to the Keybearer, his eyes fixed on the single thread of hope. It was a journey into the unknown, a journey to a place no living Player had ever returned from. He had no other choice.
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The journey back was not a violent tear in reality, but a serene, absolute command of Kael's will. With the Absolution of Karma flowing through his veins, the distance between the Nexus Sanctuary and his home world was a mere concept. He did not teleport; he simply was. He closed his eyes on a world of perfect light and opened them on a world of cold, brutal gray.
The air was heavy, not with mana, but with the subtle, suffocating energy of total control. He was back, but this was not the home he remembered. The once-bustling streets of the capital were now a silent, ordered grid. The vibrant, organic mana that had once flowed freely was now funneled into geometric conduits that pulsed with a cold, blue light. Surveillance drones, small, beetle-like automatons with glowing crimson eyes, hovered on every street corner.
Julian Ardyn, the Director, had made good on his promise. He had not just rebuilt society; he had perfected a technological dystopia.
Kael walked, his footsteps silent, on the cold, unforgiving pavement. His Karmic Sight was a new sense, an eye that saw not just physical reality, but the weight of all actions. He saw the cold, digital threads of the Orwell-Huxley Conglomerate's network, but he also saw the karmic debt of every citizen. The thin, gray threads of their unfulfilled dreams, their stolen freedoms, their silent compliance. He saw the thick, black, pulsating lines of karmic corruption that wove through the city's power grid, all leading to a single, monstrously powerful source: Julian.
Kael did not head for the Ardyn Clan mansion. That was Julian's throne room, and Kael had no interest in simply storming a castle. He had a different kind of war to wage. He went to the very heart of Julian's control: the Grand Plaza. There, a massive, crystalline obelisk stood, its surface a constant stream of propaganda and surveillance footage.
With his Karmic Sight, Kael saw that the obelisk was a grand karmic amplifier, a monument built to reinforce the idea of a single, omniscient ruler. It collected the subtle karmic debt of every controlled citizen and funneled it to Julian, strengthening his power and solidifying his control. It was the very embodiment of Julian's karmic rewriting.
Kael did not rush. He walked to the center of the Plaza, a single man standing against a tide of passive oppression. The hovering drones immediately turned their crimson eyes on him, their internal processors analyzing his threat level. They found nothing. Kael's essence was so pure, so absolved of the Game's corruption, that he was invisible to their systems.
The obelisk's projection flickered, its stream of propaganda interrupted as its core protocols registered an anomaly. Kael raised a hand. He didn't use his raw power. He used his new, true weapon. He used Absolution.
He focused his will, his pure, untainted karma, and touched the obelisk. He wasn't attacking it. He was correcting it. The obelisk, a monument of karmic debt, began to scream a sound that wasn't audible but was felt in the minds and souls of every citizen in the city. The karmic debt it had accumulated, the silent suffering and compliance of the populace, was being unraveled, absolved, and redirected.
The light of the obelisk changed, turning from a cold, blue hum to a violent, chaotic torrent of white-hot light. The propaganda vanished, replaced by a torrent of unedited, unfiltered images from the city's past. Images of joy, of freedom, of the Ardyn Clan before Julian, of the people laughing and living without fear.
Across the entire city, the population, who had lived under a mental and spiritual fog for over a year, felt a sudden, profound clarity. Their collective karmic debt was gone. The weight was lifted. Confusion turned to anger, and anger turned to a righteous, unstoppable fury. The silent streets erupted into a chaotic, joyous rebellion.
The drones, their systems overwhelmed by the karmic feedback loop, began to crash to the ground, their crimson eyes dying in a puff of smoke.
Julian's voice, a cold, angry echo, resonated from the crumbling obelisk. "Kael! What have you done? You fool! You've ruined everything! My perfect system!"
Kael's gaze was unflinching. He watched as a legion of Julian's Enforcers, a new generation of his tech-cultivators, marched into the Plaza. Their armor was sleeker, their eyes glowed with a more vibrant light, and their movements were perfectly synchronized, a beautiful, horrifying machine of death. They were here to kill him.
But Kael was no longer a simple warrior. He looked at them with his Karmic Sight. He saw their karmic threads, not of Julian's control, but of their own personal debt. He saw a loyal soldier who had joined the Enforcers to save his family—a family Julian was secretly holding hostage. He saw another who had a debt of regret for a friend they had sacrificed for power. He saw their pasts, their triumphs, and their regrets.
Kael simply raised a hand. He did not attack. He simply touched their karmic threads. He didn't break Julian's control; he absolved them from their own. The loyal soldier's eyes went wide with dawning horror as he realized his family was no longer safe, and his service was pointless. He turned his weapon on Julian's forces, a single act of furious rebellion. The other Enforcers, their own debts brought to the surface, were consumed by confusion and despair. The perfectly synchronized machine broke down in an instant, turning on itself.
Julian's face, projected on a single, remaining screen on the obelisk, was no longer a mask of cold confidence. It was a face of pure, unadulterated shock and fury. "This… this is a new kind of power. What have you done, Kael? You've broken the very rules of the Game!"
Kael, standing alone in the center of a liberated plaza, looked up. He didn't speak a word. He simply projected a single thought, a single, absolute message, not with his voice, but with the full, devastating force of his cleansed karma.
"The Game is over, Julian. It's time to pay your karmic debt."
The projection of Julian screamed in silent fury as the final, absolute truth of Kael's power settled over him. Kael was no longer just a rival. He was a force of justice. And he was coming to collect.