Hello everyone, Hazy_0832 here!
I decided to revive this old story and start writing it again whenever I get the chance. But before I fully jump into writing more chapters, I figured it'd be appropriate to go over all 19 chapters and give them a polish.
Which is what I did over the past two days.
Things I changed:
1. Instead of Sabuko dying from self-neglect in his old life, I had him kill himself after losing his home, so his obsession with living a carefree life with clones who can't leave him would make more sense.
2. He can now only make 3 clones instead of 10. I DO want Sabuko to be special, and there IS something off about him other than reincarnation, aside from the obvious, erhm... questionable motives. But I also don't want him to be some super-duper chakra monster who becomes a Hokage-level threat in five minutes.
3. In the old version, Sabuko had this disgusting habit of narrating every single character and emotion with perfect clarity in his head, as if there were an invisible audience watching him constantly. I decided that a mentally scarred dude in a child's body should probably be less stable than that, so I trimmed a lot of the fat.
4. Takos now behaves more like an actual 12-year-old and is generally less mature. Their relationship is also a little more complicated now, with less explanation and less straightforward emotions.
5. Bolo is no longer just an asshole. I figured a Jōnin deserved more respect than what I originally gave him. In the new version, Sabuko has to work much harder to get under his skin and convince him to give Sabuko another shot. Afterward, Bolo recognizes Sabuko's actual qualities as a shinobi instead of reacting to him purely emotionally.
6. Naruto was WAY too perceptive and emotionally articulate in the old version. I toned him back down to something closer to canon.
7. Kakashi is much less revealing. In the old version, he immediately trauma-dumped his entire reasoning and past onto Sabuko. In the new version, he's more reserved and restrained, which I think fits canon Kakashi much better.
And perhaps most importantly, I felt the old title was underselling the story a bit. NOT THE PREMISE! THE PREMISE IS FUCKING AWESOME IMO.
I therefore changed the title from Reincarnating in Naruto, I'll Use Shadow Clone Jutsu to Build a Harem to Shadow Clone, My Shadow Clone.
I felt the new title fits the emotional core of the story better, while still immediately signaling Naruto to anyone familiar with the series. It's also much less bloated and generic.
Other than that, thank you so much for reading, and have a great day! More chapters are in the making.